Writing
a debut novel can be a tough task. Inexperience can be a major hindrance. The
plot may digress and may not be able to hold the attention of the reader. If
such manuscripts do not go through a process of critical surveying, followed by
the tightest possible editing, then the end result could be a bad reading
experience. The review of Budd’tti, a
novel by Manuel Fernandes in the Roman script will discuss such a shortcoming
and also try to read the plot (or plots) of the novel along with the
contemporary social and political Goan world.
Manuel Fernandes has written and
directed a few tiatrs and has
presented his plays on the All India Radio. He is a regular writer who has
published his writings in many Konknni mastheads, especially Gulab.
Budd’tti
or flood is a novel which takes its inspiration from the Biblical tale of
Noah and the deluge that God had sent on the earth. Manuel Fernandes has tried
to use the symbolism of the Flood and how it inundates everything, in trying to
comment about the abysmal and egregious conditions of Goan political life and
also (I suspect) the declining moral values of Catholic families. But in
attempting to invoke this symbolism as well as wrapping a moral message for his
readers, Manuel Fernandes’ novel fails to live up to the expectations. The plot
changes directions several times; to the effect that it seems that the author
is abandoning one strand of narration and starting a new one, only to discard
it once again.
The novel opens with Ronald, a small-time
cloth merchant and his wife Ravina who are very devoted to each other. But there
is a sudden twist in the story: Ronald starts having an affair with a young
widow, Sofia. Ravina is divorced by Ronald and he drives her out of the house –
and into destitution. In another turn of events, Ronald is shown as leading an
agitation against a pollution-causing factory. This agitation snowballs into a
popular movement which propels him into politics. In due course of time he also
becomes the Chief Minister of Goa. Agitation against big industries is an
important theme in the book and I believe it is included in the narrative
because in recent times Goa has gone through many such agitations. But though
Ronald is the protagonist and contemporary politics a major space for comment,
the author seems to be struggling to keep these strands tied together in a
unifying narrative.
Ravina is shown as migrating to
Bombay, only to make a dramatic and somewhat surreal entry in the end. Manuel
Fernandes had tried to keep the suspense for the last, but such a model does
not succeed in providing a coherent and believable ending. Along with the
revamping of the plot in the editing stages of the book, the author also had a
lot of scope to expand and develop his existing narrative. Elaborating more on
the characters and the plot at the beginning of the novel would have, in my
opinion, provided a solid base to the narration.
Meanwhile, due to his power and
influence Ronald starts indulging himself in corrupt practices. He starts
smuggling arms and precious metals as well as making under-the-table deals to
set up pollution-causing industries. Ronald chances upon a hidden vault when
constructing his house and he converts it into an underground cave; a haven for
his contraband. This hidden cave is accidentally discovered by Felicio, a
journalist who puts his principles and the ethics of the profession first and
follows them to the book.
After a lot of rather bizarre twists
and turns, Ronald receives punishment for his evil deeds. His criminal
activities are exposed (though in a way that would never stand a chance in a
court of law!) and he has to run away from the long arm of the law as well as
the frenzied fury of his voters. Ronald escapes to the surrounding jungle and
returns in a state of destitution and injury to a dilapidated house, where he
breathes his last. During his funeral, suddenly, the sky becomes overcast and
there is a torrent of rain. And since the novel is set on the banks of the
Zuari (Cortalim to be precise), the banks of the river overflow and the
resulting flood washes the coffin and with it the corpse of Ronald into the
sea.
What Manuel Fernandes has tried to
do is to use Ronald as a symbol for the rot in Goan society, where everything
that we cherished has been destroyed or is on the verge of destruction. Ronald
is the corrupt politician who is selling dear Goa for his own benefit, not for
a second thinking about the general public or listening to the voice of his
conscience. And somewhere, between so much gloom and doom, there is a longing
for the good old days; for an ideal to be realized
We
can find a caution in the novel, that if we don’t wake up fast, along with our “coffins”
we will also be washed away in the sea of nothingness. This metaphor is
primarily invoked to guard the Goan identity, an issue that has gathered a lot
of storm in the recent times. But since the novel is an attempt to be a comment
and a critique on the politics, society and morality and at some level is made
to operate as a homily, it lacks nuance. Manuel Fernandes has tried to focus in
this direction but has fallen short to provide a strong argument and narrative
simply because his views are not nuanced and critical of the world he has
observed and is a part of. Coupled with a lack of planning of the plot, the
whole novel stands on shaky ground. Throughout the novel, Manuel Fernandes also
tries to portray how an ideal woman should behave and conduct herself in the
society. His portrayal of the woman being not just a seductress, but the very
object of temptation seems shallow for our times.
The cover of the book could have
been a lot better. Budd’tti is
published under the aegis of the Dalgado Konknni Akademi and as such there is a
greater responsibility resting on the shoulders of this organization to think
of including more checks and balances in the editorial department so that the
end result may not lack in the most important aspect of a book: a good reading
experience!
Budd’tti by Manuel Fernandes (Cortalim/Kutt’tthalli: Dog Bhav Prokaxon), 2011;
pp. 164, Rs. 60/-; Phone: 91-0832-2221688 (Available at Dalgado Konknni
Akademi, Panjim)
(A version of this article appeared on Gomantak Times, dt: July 28, 2012).